Young poet asks for a harsh critique and then kills the question before anyone can oblige him. C/C my C?

I read the poem & liked the sounds for sound's sake, but you are right that he used words only because they rhymed. (Sorry, kid; this might p as a 8th grade poetry ignment, but poetry is meant to have a genuine message. Stop with the pretentiousness else end up only 'thinking' you are a writer.)